Successful Statements of Excellence for Admission to Law School: Business, Commerce, Trade


Sample 1st Paragraph: LLM Program, Business, Commerce, Indian

One of the things that I find most exciting about embarking on a career in law in my country, India, is the way in which, in recent years, she has been experiencing an unprecedented legislative security that is strengthening our democracy; helping to usher in economic and policy reforms that have gone a long way to resurrect a sick and moribund economy. One key factor in this success has been a widespread resolve to protect the investments of foreign investors—the principal motor that is driving our economic growth. I plan to devote my professional lifetime to helping investors from all over the world to invest in our economic miracle, safely and profitably. It will be a profound honor for me to serve professionally in this capacity and I see NYU as the very finest program available that would provide me with the optimal platform to excel upon launching my legal career in India, after completing your particularly distinguished, cutting-edge LLM program.

With international trade on the rise, laws controlling these practices have become notably more active. Some of the most significant recent developments in international law include the Iran deal, which will forestall Iran from acquiring materials to construct a nuclear weapon, the re-establishment of diplomatic correspondences between Cuba and the United States Embassies, and the recent joint statement between the United Arab Emirates and The Republic of India. The recent reconciliations and statements between nations demonstrate that, as a whole, we are one step closer to global peace and stability.


Business Law JD Personal Statement Sample, Mexican American

Mexico currently is at 98th place in Transparency International’s ‘Worldwide Corruption Perceptions Index’ and stands alongside such countries as Burkina Faso. Although the Index may be an imperfect measure, it is known that money laundering has been increasing in the country over the past 15 years and at 2010 was estimated to involve a sum of $10 Billion. Consequently much of the money circulating in the formal economy of Mexico has originated in corrupt transactions or illegal activity and has been successfully laundered.

The problems arising from so much ‘dirty’ money circulating in the formal economy and the corruption from which it arises include: the inability of the government to accurately estimate the level of legitimate economic activity and thus apply effective economic programs; the reluctance of legitimate foreign enterprises to do business with, and in, Mexico compared to other countries and thus a loss of jobs, income and prestige; the building of sub-standard and potentially dangerous infrastructure as monies are siphoned off from project funds to pay bribes, as seen in China recently; and the risk (or reality) of a compromised and undermined banking and judicial systems, and civil service.

The Mexican government has introduced some of the toughest restrictions in history on dollar cash transactions but other types of transaction are subject to relatively loose regulation currently and much remains to be done to eradicate money laundering and thus discouraging the corruption and criminal activity that necessitates and feeds it.

I am very interested in the effects of the corruption in the country on local industry and in conducting detailed research into the measurable effects of corruption, specifically money laundering, and to learn how the Foreign Corrupt Practices Act and related regulations are currently applied and how they might be improved. It seems clear that the Mexican banking industry either lacks effective compliance regulations or is failing to apply them as intended, although the possibility that ‘loose’ regulation has been purposefully introduced cannot be excluded nor the possibility that officials may be fearful about imposing them assiduously or have been bribed not to do so, similar considerations will apply to the judiciary and the civil service.

It seems that most laundered funds eventually reach banks in countries where bank secrecy is guaranteed and that Mexican banks are merely intermediaries. The current threshold for transactions that are subject to investigation is relatively high and should, in my view, be revised urgently so that more investigations are conducted. Certainly a much more generally aggressive approach seems to be a necessary first step, if things are to be improved. There should be a right, and readiness, to examine and freeze individual bank accounts pending investigations and proceedings together with the seizure of all liquid assets belonging to the relevant individual/corporation once any transaction is established to have been illegal. Banks should be given the incentive to ensure that suspicious transactions are identified and rapidly reported by ensuring that substantial fines and other penalties are applied for any proved failure to do so.

It seems that the proactive tracking of laundered money is currently almost non-existent. It is astonishing that billions of suspect dollars are wired annually into the global financial system without investigation. The will to tackle this problem is clearly lacking for some reason and it would be interesting to try to establish exactly why this is so as well as the extent to which it is true.

Mexico is currently conducting 15 open investigations with the US authorities but it is understood that the US authorities regard as inadequate the mechanisms for the exchange of information and so the means of liaison should be improved substantially and urgently.

To summarize: either regulation is inadequate or is not being imposed or is imposed on an uneven basis. I would say that all these situations apply but that it is necessary to know the extent to which each obtain so that effective remedies can be formulated. 

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LLM degree in Commercial or Business Law?

Individuals who are interested in pursuing careers in finance, international commerce and global policy making, or who wish to practice as a barrister or solicitor under the court of law, may be strongly compelled to obtain a LLM degree, otherwise known as Master of Laws. Applicants who seek to complete this degree are generally interesting in legal practice. While the LLB degree or Bachelor of Laws is considered the first admission into legal practice, further training and schooling is often required in the United States and Canada. As a result, American and Canadian applicants often opt for a Juris Doctor or Masters of Laws degree. Students who choose to study in the area of business in commercial law specifically, may be attracted to the idea of becoming a corporate solicitor, commercial or finance lawyer, or serve as legal counsel for a large firm, whether internationally or domestically. With the recent national surplus of undergraduate law students, the employment rate for LLB graduates has unfortunately decreased: so one of the major advantages for applicants who choose to obtain their LLM degree in Commercial and Business Law is the increased amount of compensation these individuals are likely to receive for their work as a specialized attorney in their field.

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