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Sample 1st Paragraph LLM Degree Human Rights, African-American

I am a young African-American woman who takes great pride in her celebration of diversity and multicultural immersion. Living in Japan and nearing fluency in Japanese, I seek out people from all over the world to learn from, especially concerning questions of human rights. I intend to make my concern for human rights the center of my career focus since my short term goal is to serve my country as a Foreign Service Officer in a diplomatic post. I see earning the LLM Degree in Human Rights from your program as the optimal preparation for useful service in the representation and implementation of US foreign policy abroad.

Sample 1st 2 Paragraphs for the LLM Degree, Women’s Issues Afghanistan

A young woman from Afghanistan who has now completed her undergraduate studies in the UK in Sociology and Criminology, I am presently gearing up at the age of 21 for a lifetime of human rights activism in support of my people, the women and children of Afghanistan. Your LLM Program in International Human Rights Law at XXXX University if my first choice for graduate school because of the focus and dedication of your program to the cause of international human rights.

We the women of Afghanistan are arguably the most victimized women on the planet, victims of violence and poverty born from one of the world’s most brutal patriarchies that has been torn apart by warfare for centuries, colonization attempts, cold war rivalries, and more recently the foremost hotbed of international terrorist proliferation. For some time now, the eyes of the world have been upon Afghanistan and the world has been making enormous, international military and civil efforts to pacify and develop my country, with the women all too often caught up in the crossfire resulting from attempts at modernization in a country where many see Western-style development as heresy punishable by death. The sale of female children in marriage, femicide, attacks on girl’s schools, the assassination of women politicians, they all continue on a daily basis, fed by frequently corrupt, Western-supported politicians on one side and a virulently violent fundamentalist movement on the other, the Taliban, which continues to elude efforts to destroy it. Peace talks between the two sides are making no progress.

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Human Rights Law Sample 1st Paragraph

A 22 year old woman from Azerbaijan, I obtained my Bachelor’s Degree from the Law faculty of the Academy of XXXX under the President of the Republic of Azerbaijan in 2004. Currently employed as a legal assistant, I am completing a 2 month internship with UNESCO, confirming my engagement with human rights law as my life’s work. I hope to be accepted to your prestigious program because of your emphasis on legal issues related to democracy and human rights.

I live in a country with arbitrary arrest and detention of anyone that the government sees as a political opponent. There is an entrenched and pervasive corruption in the judiciary as well as law enforcement, all of which has resulted in restrictions on media freedom, freedom of assembly, and political participation. Completing your distinguished program will prepare me to work to change this situation after returning home.

The LLB Degree and Human Rights Law

Law has been considered one of the most highly esteemed and revered university subjects since its very beginnings. Legal issues affect almost every crucial aspect of life, including business and environmental matters, economics, international relations, trade and politics. Many applicants choose to specialize in human rights, before focusing on other areas of law, or as a specialization that later leads on to a career in the international human rights legal framework, such as those who work in the field of immigration. With international integration on the rise alongside a massive shift in and exchange of worldviews, today’s law school applicants may be more inclined to strive towards a LLB Degree with a specialization in Human Rights Law, especially if it corresponds to their own personal, specific areas of interests. The other principal reason law students choose to study in the area of human rights is because they want the opportunity to divulge and defend on a number of 21st century legal issues, such as terrorism, indigenous rights, invasion of privacy and other topics related to international law in the real world.

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Explaining Low LSAT Scores, Human Rights of Children in Haiti, Haitian Applicant

I ask to be admitted to your distinguished LLM Program at XXXX University despite the fact that my LSAT scores are low, for two reasons. First, I am a young woman from Haiti, raised in Haiti until the age of 14; now, at 21, I still face language limitations in English. I would not even have been taking the LSAT examination if it were not for the terrible earthquake that struck our island home 7 years ago resulting in my parents sending me to live with my godmother in Florida and attending school in America. Secondly, since my mother is a doctor in Haiti who attended to and managed programs for mobile emergency attention for the poor, street people in particular, I have special potential as a legal expert concerned with the human rights of children in Haiti. Boys as well as girls who live on the street in my country are victims of rape at the hands of random people and they have no legal assistance.

The Humanitarian Side of a Human Rights Degree

If you´re interested in becoming a human rights laywer, you must know about the various inspiring young human rights laywers around you. Right? Well one of the most inspiring international lawyers, with her monumental legal wins in Afghanistan, is Kimberley Motley.

Okay, so let´s start at the beginning.

Kimberley Chongyon Motley is an African American and Korean International Attorney, mother of three, and former Mrs. Wisconsin-America 2004. She is known for being the first non-Afghan attorney to litigate in Afghanistan since 2008.

She is licensed and has permission to practice in Wisconsin, the U.S. Supreme Court, Dubai International Financial Courts, and the International Criminal Courts.

She is also considered to be one of the most effective defense attorneys operating in Afghanistan. In the male-dominated, Afghan court and prison system, Motley “must appear to be someone from outer space. She acknowledges this but declares that she gets respect… She has proven to be a very effective and tenacious fighter,” says Tom Freston of Vanity Fair magazine. Motley has been described as possessing: “a rare kind of grit—the kind necessary to hang a shingle in Kabul, represent the under-represented, weather a kaleidoscope of threats, and win the respect of the Afghan legal establishment (and of tribal leaders).”

Tom Rosenstock, an attorney that has been working in Kabul since 2008, told the Daily Beast in 2010 that Motley may be doing more “to promote rule of law than large ambitious programs which never get to where the rubber meets the road.” A Western diplomat called Motley “the kind of person who makes you change [your] opinion about lawyers.”

Here is a video about how Kimberley Motley defends the rule of law:

In 2008, after being a public defender in Milwaukee for five years, Motley went to Afghanistan as part of a nine-month legal education program run by the U.S. State Department to train Afghan lawyers.

She had never traveled outside the U.S. before! “In that nine months,” she later told the audience during a TED talk, “I went around the country and I talked to hundreds of people that were locked up, and I talked to many businesses that were also operating in Afghanistan. And within these conversations, I started hearing the connections between the businesses and the people, and how laws that were meant to protect them were being underused, while gross and illegal punitive measures were overused. And so this put me on a quest for justness, and what justness means to me is using laws for their intended purpose, which is to protect. The role of laws is to protect. So as a result, I decided to open up a private practice, and I became the first foreigner to litigate in Afghan courts.”

At first, she represented Westerners and other non-Afghans in Afghan prisons. Motley's first defendant was an African woman convicted of drug trafficking. “She was a drug mule sent to Afghanistan by a European pimp. She had been in prison for two years with her 3-year-old daughter. She was convicted of 14 years in prison, so her child would have grown up in jail. She had gone through almost all of her legal options. I felt very helpless, and I do believe her case helped define and shape who I am. She was not afforded her due process under Afghan law. She and her child were tucked away in an Afghan prison, forgotten.” Eventually, Motley was able to secure a presidential decree ordering the woman's release.

In 2009, Motley became the CEO of Motley Consulting International, of which she is a Founding Partner. Since that year, she has also been CEO of Motley Legal Services, which provides legal representation in the U.S. and Afghanistan. 

She spends approximately six months in a fortified house in Kabul, where she provides representation for criminal and human-rights cases there. She is working on growing the capacity of rule of law internationally. She is registered as an attorney with the American, French, U.A.E., Australian, Spanish, Dutch, British, Italian, Norwegian, German, and Canadian Embassies in Afghanistan, so she is routinely contacted by expatriates who are facing legal troubles with Afghan authorities.

“Motley works for the release of foreigners languishing in Afghan jails,” reported a media outlet in 2010, “and often her work starts after the verdict—as in the case of an Australian on death row, convicted of murdering an Afghan colleague; a South African sentenced to fifteen years in prison on drug charges, and a Brit convicted of fraud.” For example, she negotiated the release of Bill Shaw, a former British military officer held in the notorious Pul-e-charki prison for five months.

Motley never wears a veil or a dress during a trial. “I need to look like a man as much as possible...I find that men hear me more when I don’t wear a headscarf. I wore it at first, and when I took it off, I found men were more respectful,” she says.

From 2010, Motley was under a threat from the Afghan District Attorney's office to arrest her next time she set foot in Kabul, as retribution for her harsh criticism of Afghanistan's corrupt judicial system.

But she had no hesitation about returning. “I have clients back there,” she said. “They need my help.” She also receives rape threats. “If I was a man, I’d get more death threats, I suppose. But I get those as well.” She has also been “temporarily detained”, “accused of running a brothel” and of espionage. A grenade was thrown at her office, but she has said that the rewards of her job “far outweigh the risks, and as many risks as I take, my clients take far greater risks, because they have a lot more to lose if their cases go unheard, or worse, if they're penalized for having me as their lawyer. With every case that I take, I realize that as much as I'm standing behind my clients, that they're also standing behind me, and that's what keeps me going.”